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Some people think a higher percentage of young adults' population is more beneficial for countries because there are many benefits to government funds. They claim that a comparably high amount of young adults are more helpful to the country to be developed. (여기는 이렇게 두 문장으로 길게 갈 필요가 전혀 업습니다. alfzm54321님 실력이면 충분히 알아서 수정하실 수 있을 거니까, 한 문장으로 합쳐서 간추린 다음에 댓글로 검사 받으세요!) I support this idea because it gives countries many long-term advantages for their citizens.
Firstly, the younger generation has more working hours than the older generation because they could live longer. As the working ages boost, this eventually leads to government wealth due to an increase in (이게 조금 더 문어체에 가깝다고 보시면 됩니다.) increasing labor taxes. Then, the government will spend funds to education and social well-fare, and this action will develop the country to be salubrious. (여기서 엔터키 따로 치지 않습니다. 밑의 문단도 마찬가지이고요.) For example, the government brings its funds by implementing taxes to expend and earning, as economic vitalizing is done by mostly younger people. It is advantageous for the country to be well functioning. On the other hand, the government usually spends money on social well-fair and subsidy for elderly people. Therefore, having more younger adults in countries is more beneficial than those old people.
Secondly, when there are more younger people, they can be helpful for job creation. Since many young adults bring money to their own country by working in other countries, it brings wealth to their motherland. Many young people prefer to work in other countries not only for a wide range of experiences but also for money. For example, South Korea had a hard time after the 6.25 war. Many people moved to Germany (이거 은근히 많은 학생들이 틀리는데 주의해주세요!) and Vietnam to earn money. Because they have a limited age border, only young adults could board to work in other countries, the same as working holiday visas to other countries. This also shows that many companies and countries have standards for working since they usually want to employ people who have strong physic. Therefore, young adults have more opportunities to work than older people.
To sum up, having more younger generation helps the country to be more wealthy by paying more taxes and bring wealth (바로 앞에 있는 표현이니까 가급적이면 대체해주시는 게 좋습니다.( by working in other countries. For these reasons, the advantages of the country which has include a higher number of young adults outweigh the disadvantages.
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