The maps illustrate the transformation of Grange Park, which was opened in 1920. (현재라는 표현도 들어가는 게 좋습니다.)
Overall, a comparison of the two maps reveals a complete improvement from less entertaining facilities to a more leisured area.
In the year 1920, a A fountain was placed in the middle of the park, and there were two entrances above the fountain and underneath of it. However, the fountain has been replaced to a rose garden with seats in every direction. On the left side of the rose garden, now it has an amphitheatre for concerts but it was used for a to stage for musicians in 1920. Over the amphitheatre, there is an another rose garden, and it still remains the same spot as 1920. On the right side of the map, there was a pond for water plants in 1920, but a children’s play area is established in the pond area at now. Next to the children’s play facility, a cafe is structured near the entrance to to the Arnold Avenue entrance. Below the cafe and play area, now it has a water feature but in 1920, a glasshouse was located in the position. In addition, at present, there is an entrance to an underground car part right along with the water feature.
총평; (7/6/7/6) 6.5
일단 6.0은 당연히 받는 글이니까 크게 걱정할 필요는 없습니다. 자잘한 오류가 있어서 글이 가끔 매끄럽게 이어지지 못하는 모습이 보였지만, 나머지에서는 문제가 없기 때문에 괜찮을 거에요.
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