The table depicts statistical information
about the percentage of government spending in five domestic policies in
Germany, Italy and the United Kingdom in the year of 2009. In general, it is
clear that all three countries spent the least on the sector of environmental
protection.
Looking at the table more closely, as for
the expenditure in health and economic affairs, the figures were similar in
three countries. Also, the rates of government spending in health were the
highest in Germany and the United Kingdom, while the biggest figure of
government money usage was public services in Italy, which was also the highest
rate from the table. (여기에 구체적인 수치를 넣어주셔야 합니다. Overview에서는 구체적인 수치가 들어가지 않지만, 세부 분석을 할 때에는 오히려 넣을 필요가 있어요.)
In addition, when it comes to the section
of education, the rate of the British government spending was nearly 2% points
higher than the rates in Germany and Italy, which were 6.4% in the UK and 4.3%
and 4.6% in Germany and Italy, respectively. It is also noteworthy that in the
case of public services, there was a clear gap between the percentages of
government spending in Germany, Italy, and the UK, which accounted for 6.6%,
8.6 % (붙여주시면 됩니다.) and 4.6% each.
시간: 21분
단어 수: 186개
목표 점수: overall 7.0 each 6.5
감사합니다.
총평: (6/7/7/6) 6.5
적어도 '틀린 건' 거의 없기 때문에 6.5는 당연히 받는 글이고, 경우에 따라 7.0까지도 괜찮을 겁니다. 비록 문장 구조가 살짝 단조로운 편이긴 하나, 지금처럼 안 틀리는 게 더 중요하니까 그것에 우선순위를 두어주세요!
수고하셨습니다 :)