The illustrated line graph outlines the percentage change of vehicle registrations for three most used types of commercial vehicles in the US over an interval of 40 years.
As an overall trend, it is clearly apparent that although the proportion of registrations for each type of vehicle changed over time, by the end of the 40-year period, trucks still made up the largest share, followed by taxis and then buses.
In 1970, the lion share of the percentage of vehicle registration was for trucks decreasing to 30% (어디로 감소했다는 내용이 정당화되려면, 일단 시작점이 언급되어야 합니다) in 1980 and after that, it had been gradually increased by 2010. The proportion of taxis registrations had a sharp improvement by 1980 and changed the trend as decreasing from approximately 35% in 1980 to around 15% in 2000, and it had been dramatically increased (increase/decrease의 경우 task1에서 정~~~말 많이 쓰일 건데, 동의어 역시 정~~~말 많이 존재합니다. 이를 적극적으로 활용해서 어휘의 단조로움을 피해주세요!) to around 34% in 2010, which was a similar proportion in 1980. Interestingly, the proportion of trucks registrations had been overtaken by taxis between around 1980 and 1985. (하지만 다시 재역전이 있는 상황이므로, 그것까지 마무리해주셔야 합니다.) (여기서 엔터 치지 않습니다. 아예 엔터 없이 가거나, 엔터를 두 번 쳐서 문단을 나눠주세요!)
Buses stood at under 10% in 1970, which was the lowest proportion of vehicle registration among 3 categories, and steadily increased to approximately 15% in 1980. After 1980, the percentage of buses registration turned over decreasing to around 4% in 2010 which still had a smaller rate than trucks or taxis.
총평: (7/7/6/7) 7.0
어휘, 문장 구조 등이 비교적 단조롭기는 했으나, 최소한 틀린 어휘나 문법은 거의 없었기 때문에 이정도면 충분히 7.0은 가능할 겁니다. 그래도 특히 어휘 쪽이 단조로운 건 맞기 때문에 increase/decrease는 꼭 대체해주세요. 얘네는 거의 동의어가 제일 많은 단어 중 하나로 보셔도 무방합니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)