Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism brings more advantages or disadvantages to a country?
These days, tourism has been encouraged in a number of countries. I personally believe this development brings more advantages.
First, In in terms of economical aspects, this development can contribute to the society in many ways. Some nations that treat tourism industries as a significant business has have already been making huge profits from the tourists. This is why a lot of governments dedicate to promote their counties to foreign countries. For instance, winter in Switzerland is always important and busy because many visitors come to the country Switzerland to enjoy the ski resort or travel traveling beautiful cities as well. Also, the money that tourists from overseas bring is foreign currency and this is absolutely worth to activate the economy economic.
Moreover, society also an be provided many job opportunities from the community. Usually, tourism requires the involvement of a lot of people involved because visitors usually travel around various places such as any cultural or historical sites in that local area or visit famous restaurants. Some communities actually have most of their foreign customers or guests from overseas. Thus, it can be expected that people can a get job more easily, and this development will absolutely affect positively to the country and as well as individualities.
In conclusion, I believe governments investing and encouraging tourism can cause many positive consequences. Economically, some nations that have many beautiful places to visit can make many profits and get foreign currency from tourists from overseas. In addition, this development also can provide many job opportunities to the society.
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