In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.
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It is true that attributable to various causes, such as an advanced medical treatment and an availabilty to decent ingredients, people today tend to live longer than those in the past. However, this social phenonomon can have a detrimental impact on both individuals and society. Therefore, in order to solve this serious problem, we need feasible and pragmatic solutions to reduce the influence of ageing population.
The longer life span could lead to increased financial burdens to both tax payers and the government. It is axiomatic that a large number of elderly people means that we need to spend more budget in welfare for senior citizens. In an attempt to do so, the government needs to collect a more amount of money from citizens who pay taxes, especially people from their in 20s to in 60s, making them charge another economic burden. Furthermore, the government also have to borrow part of other budgets that belong to other sectors in an effort to deal with the demand of healthcare by the aged. Therefore, it will bring about an unbalanced distribution of the budget, leading to a social instability.
Nevertheless, there are several means to reduce the impact of this social issue. It is an undeniable fact that the more opportunities old citizens get, the more taxes the government could gather. Generally speaking, when people become 65-year-old they need to retire from their workplaces but could not find the right occupations because of their age. However, by expending retirement age and bestowing an array of jobs that could be suitable to elderly people, the government does not have to ask tax payers to pay more money on this issue. Consequently, the overall emphasis on ageing populations could decline.
In conclusion, when all specific reasons and relevant examples are considered and evaluated, the problem that is driven by the large number of the aged could be resolved through putting off retirement and offering job oppotunities to them.
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