Dear James,
Hello, this is Yuni. How are you today? I want to ask you something about next week's holiday. I saw the poster about camping holiday. So I want you to go camping with me. I think you will enjoy the camping holiday. Because you want to sleep outside because you wanted to sleep outside, when you were a child and we can make a best memories in the camping holiday in our whole life. Also, you like to meet people and talk with other people. I think it would be a good chance is so good chances to make new friends and talk with new people.
But there are is some disadvantages about sleeping outside. Because we don't have a private washroom and room. we, we have to use public washroom with other people and we need to sleep with other friends in a tent. But, it will help us while we live our life. And we will go camping to a mountain and we will sleep near the lake. So, there are a lot of insects and bugs. These things will make you annoyed these will make you are annoy. We also have to make foods for our meals. The teacher will help us, but we have to make almost things. So, it will be little hard.
There are a lot of difficult things. but I think it will make us closer than now and we have new memories about experience. So I really want to go camping with you. This summer camping is highly likely to be our last, because as you know, is our last summer camping. Because we have to graduate after this summer. I want to know about you more than now and become closer than now. I hope you have same thoughts with me. After you give a good thought about this, let are thinking about this summer camping, Let me know.
Thank you
Best Regards,
Yuni Lee
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