▶ Your Answer : The given line graphs illustrate the main demographic shift in Scotland from 1940 to the estimation of 2020, categorized by three different components; birth rate, population growth rate and death rate.
Birth rate shows a remarkable shift throughout the whole period. It showed a steady decrease after it reached its at the peak at by 2.2% in 1950. In particular Especially, there was sharp drop between 1950 and 1960
Another component is population growth rate, which shows a similar trend with the birth rate shows. The only difference is that there has been dramatic increase from 1943 to 1955.
In contrast to birth rate and population rate., death rates represents a unique trends. It has declined sharply from 1940 to 1956 and remained roughly 0.5% until 2000. However,it, surprisingly, shows a sharp rise from 2010 and is estimated to rise sharply in the future.
Overall, the trends show that the general overall Scottish population is expected to decline. <(이 내용이 Introduction 다음으로 오면 더 좋을 것 같습니다)
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