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The supplied
line graph plots the average carbon dioxide (hereafter CO2) emission per
capita from 1967 to 2007 in four main European nations, the UK, Sweden, Italy,
and Portugal. On the whole, the average of the UK shows the
highest emission throughout the given span despite a gradual decrease. While Italy
and Portugal’s average output steadily climbed up for 40 years, that of
Sweden dropped significantly. Considering the former half of the period by
1987, the CO2 discharge of the UK started the highest in the graph which emitted
11 metric tonnes(hereafter MT) and it is followed by that of Sweden which depicts
about 9 MT in the beginning. The emission of Italy was almost half less that of
Sweden, and Portugal produced mere 1 MT. (여기의 경우도 굳이 4개 다 언급할 필요까지는 없습니다. 대신 무조건 지워라까지는 아니므로, 시간 문제가 없으셨다면 그냥 적으셔도 무방해요.) For the next 10 years, Sweden, Italy
emitted 2 MT more than the beginning. Even though that of Sweden nosedived to
7 MT in 1987 which shows the marginal difference with that of Italy, Italian
and Portuguese CO2 emission went up and that of the UK indicates an insignificant
down. On the other hand, the latter half of the span
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감사합니다.
총평: 잘 써주셨고, 보통은 영국이랑 스웨덴을 하나에, 나머지 둘을 또다른 하나에 묶어서 작성하는 경향이 있지만 지금처럼 문단을 나눈다고 해도 아무 문제는 없습니다. (객관적으로 봤을 때 뚜렷한 기준이 있으면 문단은 어떻게 나누든 상관없습니다.)
수고하셨습니다 :)