The bar chart indicates that the production and consumption of
electricity in 2014 from the top ten countries.
Most countries shows production and consumption is not different a lot. We can
notice that the top 2 countries' consumption and production of electricity is
way higher than other 8 countries.
To be specific, China is the first country which electricity is the
most consumed and produced in 2014. This record is about 8 times higher than Korea. Difference between consumption
and production of electricity in China is not much different and it is only
76kwh. The second largest country is USA. Each point of consumption and production
is 3,866 khw and 4099khw and it is approximately 4 times higher than Russia. Russia is the 3rd
country which is between USA and Japan. Russia and Japan's figures are not much
different. Its productions are 120.8kwh and its consumption is 81.3 khw. The 5th country is India . India is the most different country for gap between
production and consumption. It shows 172.2 khw. From 6th and 9th, it follows Canada, France, Brazil and
Germany. Korea is the last country which electricity is less consumed and
produced electricity in 2014.
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