Some people believe that the costs of space exploration are worth it,
but others believe that space exploration is a waste of money.
To what extent do you agree or disagree.
To begin with, I agree with the opinion that the costs of valuable space exploration is worth it.
People have a great many opinions about costs for the experience.
Some people said say the vicarious experience can replace the actual space exploration.
however However, some actual experience can not is irreplaceable.
This essay will discuss that.
Many people think that space exploration is too much expensive for knowledge.
Also, due to technological development, the opportunity of vicarious experience has increased in ways such as virtual experience or 3D views.
For instance, virtual experience, 3D view, films..
They claim through the that second experience enables people to do knowing such as actual space exploration. (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다. 앞으로 초록색 문장들은 다 댓글 주시면 돼요!)
However, I think some kinds of exploration are unknown territory without actual experience like the first moon exploration.
If humans did not visit the moon at that time, we could not have gone go to the next step about space.
It was very expensive but worth it and people perfectly can not know this kind of experience via virtual experience or whatever.
To sum up, I fairly agree with them whose those who believe that costs of space exploration are valued.
What I mentioned before about it, I believe in worth it.
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