Some people believe that the development of artificial intelligence will make human labour obselete. Others think that work performed by humans will always be important.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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It is a common belief that the development
of artificial intelligence will make humans' work to nothing. However, I firmly
believe that work performed by humans will always plays a vital role because
there are things that cannot (줄임말은 풀어써주셔야 합니다. 다른데에도 다 풀어주시면 돼요.) can’t be done by machines but humans can.
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On the one hand, people think that
artificial intelligence will replace humans' work with machines that have an to auto program
because the latter machines is more efficient and generates higher income than humans. To be
more specific, machines can do more sophisticated work compared to humans
without errors. For example, research has shown that machines could make more
products than humans in an hour which leads to higher return, along with minimum cost (일단 여기는 임시조치를취해놓긴 했으나, 본론2의 예시와 같이 더 구체적이어야 합니다.). Thereby, the
companies prefer to use machines.
Nevertheless, I support the idea that work
performed by humans will always be important because there are essential parts
of the workforce that machines can’t do, but humans can. While machines repeatedly do
undifferentiated work, humans can perform do various styles of work and
communicate with clients which leads to more satisfaction to them. For
instance, when we make a craft for our customer, we can accept their needs and
create the product with our emotions. However, the only thing that machines can
do is making the product with data that has been inserted to them. As a
consequence, the client will be satisfied with humans' work, not machines work instead of that from machines.
To sum up, while it is apparent that the
development of artificial intelligence will invade humans' work field, it is
undeniable that humans will always be important in performing work.
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