안녕하세요, 목표는 7점이고 시험은 12월 중으로 생각하고 있습니다.
152자이고 16분 걸렸습니다.
감사합니다. 즐거운 추석 연휴 되세요.
Dear Sir or Madam,
Hello, this is Ian Jeong, (여기에 쉼표 하나 넣어야합니다.) a member of your loyal club of your cinema. I recently decided to discontinue my membership for several reasons.
Before mentioning of that, I have been a VIP member for 3 years and have paid 10 dollars per month. I visited your cinema for a few times with my friends after my work. I also like to visit the cinema on the weekend and I have earned several benefits from this membership such as a free popcorn and beverage once a month and free seat upgrades 2 times a month.
However, I recently moved house (한국어에서도 집을 이사했다라고 하지 않고 이사했다라고만 하죠. 영어의 경우도 마찬가지입니다.) to another city. I did not want to discontinue my membership, but there is no cinema in my new city. Therefore, I needed to stop continuing my VIP membership. I am so sorry to write this letter to you. I hope to get your reply sooner.
Thank you.
Sincerely,
Ian Jeong.
총평: (7/7/7/7) 7.0
잘 써주셨습니다. 세 가지 조건을 어느정도 잘 반영해주셨고, 어휘 문법의 경우도 적어도 틀린 사항은 많지 않았네요. 이정도면 어느정도 준수한 점수를 기대할 수 있을 겁니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)