■ DirectionYou have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.■ QuestionSummarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading

The bar chart illustes the percentage of men and women in various age groups who did exercise regularly. Overall, we can see from the data that the proportion of men of those who did regular exercise tend to decrease over the age and show a slight increase after 44, while for women, the pattern is vice versa.

Looking more closely at the chart, it is observed that more than 40% of men did physical activity regularly, except in the age group between 35 and 44, which has the lowest proportion(39.5%) of people who did exercise among all the groups. It is also shown that there is a pattern of decrease in percentage when we look at the ones of men’s from 15 to 44. However, the proportion increases after the age of 44, and it reaches 46.7% in the oldest group. (여기서는 엔터 없이, 혹은 엔터 두 번으로 가시면 됩니다.)

Meanwhile, when it comes to the pattern of the percentage of women, it constantly increases upto 53.3%, which is in the group of people from 45 to 54. After that, it decreases.

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6.5야 무난하게 받는 글이긴 한데, 제가 석사유학님께 기대하는 것에 비해서는 조금 아쉬웠습니다. 남녀 간 각 항목의 직접적인 수치 분석도 추가되면 좋아요. 예를 들면 지금 제일 어린 나이대의 사람들을 제외하면, 모조리 여성 쪽의 수치가 높습니다.

수고하셨습니다 :)