Q. some people say that web content should be used to instruct children. others think that it is not helpful in an educational setting. discuss both views and give your own opinion.
A. It is a common belief that web content is not going to be useful in children's instruction. Conversely, using web content to instruct children is a good idea and helpful to both of the children and parents.
on On the one hand, using web content will be stressful to the parents (서론에서도 그렇고, 굳이 부모님으로 한정지어야 할 이유는 없습니다. 선생님 등에도 충분히 적용의 여지가 있기 때문이죠.) as they need to make their child focus on studying which means, using web content is hard to focus on studying (바로 앞에 같은 표현이 있기 때문에 대체해주시는 게 좋습니다.). Inside of the web content, there are a lot of disturbances that children might enjoy rather than studying themselves. By a way of example, there are a lot of intriguing games children would like to try instead of taking a class, as children (이 친구의 경우 동의어가 엄청 많습니다. 적절히 활용해주세요!) only devote to playing games, parents will think web content is useless to make them study.
Nevertheless, web content might help children to have gain an interest In in studying. As the web content includes a lot of cute characters that engage children, and they might become fascinated about them. Once they get interested, they will tempt to initiate studying. In fact, on the Internet internet, users Users left a few comments on their blogs about what they've (줄임말은 풀어써주셔야 합니다.) felt while their children were using it and it had a lot of positive effects. Also, the parents were so glad that their children get studied to study without a complaint.
To summarize my opinion briefly, It it is apparent that web content is just an obstruction for children but it is undeniable that web content makes children get interested in studying so it should be used as an educational setting.
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