Many automobile manufacturers crated self-driving systems for their vehicles.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of releasing cars with these systems.
These days, cutting-edge technology is getting
more and more developed in contemporary society. It is a common belief that setbacks
of self-driving automobile systems outweigh benefits of that. However, there is a (이정도는 맞혀주셔야 합니다.) are more persuasive argument that the function of self-driving automobile can
reduce car accidents and be useful in our society.
On the other hand, self-driving automobile
systems should save their information to operate their car, and these details, including physical information of drivers may be recorded wherever and whenever they drive where, when they go, even their physical details. It could allow cause hackers to open people’s information, so these risks might be problems. It means that
users of this automobile could not ensure their privacy and security. Hence, this
technology of automobile might give some risks to people’s lives.
Nevertheless, there are several benefits
about utilizing a self-driving automobile. Firstly, this function is able to
reduce frequency of automobile accidents, by calculating distance of other vehicles
and controlling its own speed rate. This is because the vehicle which possesses this system is designed to be more sensitive than ordinary people. What is more, disabled people
will be possible to go their hospital or somewhere without anyone's help. This can
bring their free and can save their money that they should pay to assistants.
In this regard, many people will be able to move safer than driving their own
car.
To sum up, despite of the fact that
information of self-driving automobile’s user could be under exposure dangerous, there are
more advantages of introducing that function, because it can reduce reducing vehicle accidents and help the disabled move more freely moving freely for a disorder.
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