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<Topic> Some people say that international
sporting events contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree? |
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It is clear
to say the reason why global sports events were created is in order to forge the
solidarity and world peace among countries. Nonetheless, the gargantuan
number of people give their voice to revoke holding international sports games
these days because they believe that it conveys detrimental impacts on people.
As I have an inclined notion against the positive effects of international sports
games, the supportive ideas will be discussed in this essay to reinforce my standpoint.
First and foremost Furthermore, as
those matches require biblical investments, it can be a burden of citizens. Constructing
stadiums accommodating millions of people, athletes’ dorm, and managements of
those facilities after the game need exorbitant taxes. For example, although Korea
held the Seoul Olympic Game successfully in 1988, scores of people complained
about leaped taxes and criticized the government’s policy which was conducted
before the game. This was because To conclude, even
though global sports events were created to thrive peace on the Earth and the
social prosperity, I am firmly convinced that those games are not indispensable
since it can ignite conflicts among people who have different nationalities
and require a plethora of taxes. |
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감사합니다.
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