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There are negative opinions that countries
are becoming similar because people can buy the same products anywhere in the
world. However, some people believe that becoming similar phenomenon in
countries this phenomenon has a positive development.
On the one hand, it can be disappeared each
country’s characteristic the characteristics of each country can be disappeared by purchasing the same products such as clothing,
smart phone and etc. Recently, people can buy anything whatever they want through
website even though the distance is far from location where people live. For
example, wireless earphone is getting popular in the global and almost people are
wearing them with same maker. (이 문단의 경우 총평에서 말씀드릴 근본적인 논제와의 불일치로 인해 어차피 지워져야하지만, 그 외의 또다른 문제점도 있습니다. 기본적으로 첫 문장에서 각 나라의 정체성에 관한 언급을 해주셨죠. 그러면 이후 문장들에서는 그 정체성이 어떤 식으로 상실되는지를 작성해주셔야 하는데, 현재 지워진 부분들은 그저 이미 논제에서 전제가 된 사항인 '사람들이 같은 물건을 사고 있는 현상' 에 대한 반복을 하고 있을 뿐입니다. 그렇기 때문에 문제가 있는 거죠. 보다 본질적인 문제에 대해서는 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
Although it has a the negative development,
people often say that there are positive sides about becoming similar. This is
because there are no differences each country and people can feel the same
level by using the same products. According to the research, people who live in
western countries used to have has a perspective that eastern people are poor and live in
bad environment than them. People are getting changing this perspective and
stereotype that they have and can check easily through YouTube You tube, SNS and etc.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that some
people think it (문단에 처음 등장하는 대상이 대명사로 작성되지 않도록 주의해주세요~) with negative development. However, I personally believe that
becoming similar in countries is a positive development because it is related with
the inalienable right.
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