In recent decades, the rate of crimes by children under 18 has been increasing significantly. While some people argue that children who commit a crime need to be punished, others claim that education is a better way for children. This essay will illustrate both points of view, and provide my perspective below.
To begin with, it is true that nowadays, young criminals commit serious crimes over and over so strong punishment is needed to prevent further harm crimes. In fact, children are more exposed to serious crime since the development of media. Teenagers can easily access various violent and provocative materials from the Internet. This phenomenon leads children to gain get interest in serious wrongdoings such as drug, murder and sexual assault drugging, murdering and raping. Teenage crime has become more and more severe, and because of them, innocent people are huge damanged (이거보다 더 나은 표현 쓰실 수 있습니다.). Therefore, strong punishments can be an important method in order to reduce these horrible situations. If children become to realize the fear from punishments, they will not commit a crime anymore.
On the other hand, there are a lot of kids commit some small crimes due to poverty. To elaborate, children who are struggling with poverty and hunger tend to commit crimes such as stealing some food or money to manage their lives. In a certain country which has insufficient welfares and education systems, so children find it are difficult to go to school. Because of lack of education, children can not learn moral mindset and important knowledge or skills for future employment during their childhood. This leads the poor children to fall into a criminal’s life. These social problems are also attributed to governments and adults. Therefore, for these poor children, education is the best way to teach them moral sense and new skills for finding jobs.
In conclusion, it seems to me that while teenagers who commit serious crimes should be punished, the poor children should be protected by education. Personally, I believe that it depends on children’s situation, so if they attact innocent people for their enjoyment, they should be punished strongly. However, if children commit crimes due to hunger or illness, education is a better way for them.
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