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Recently, the question of whether it is necessary to spend budgets on researching outer spaces and other planets in case that people may not be able to live on the Earth has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that it is worth to explore exploring other planets due to the destruction of the environment, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I accept that it is crucial to spend revenue on research in other planets such as Mars, but(꼭 필요합니다.) I believe that money should be spent on other fields for the development of the environment. On the one hand, there are several compelling reasons why people insist that government should spend more money on exploring space in order to find planets as a second Earth. First, climate change has caused various environmental issues, which are serious, such as natural disasters such as including hurricane, tsunami, flood and bushfire. Not only that, but also the level of the ocean is gradually increasing, which results in the decrease in of the spaces for people to reside. Second, because of the excessive use of natural resources, many nations may have to struggle with shortages of resources in various industries that manufacture important products for people. In addition, an increase in the population has caused serious pollution such as air, water and soil pollution, which could result in the environment that people cannot live in the future.(발문을 고려했을 때 이 문단은 불필요합니다.) On the other hand, I believe that there are more important areas for the government to spend their revenue than research in the other planets. The Earth still has a chance to be recovered by various efforts of governments, enterprises and individuals.(이 뒤에서 기업체나 개인의 노력 관련 내용은 나오고 있지 않으므로 불필요합니다.) Firstly, the government can develop and improve public transportation systems in order for the citizens to use them in lieu of using private vehicles that can lead to the serious air pollution. Secondly, government should spend money on researching in the fields related to the environmental protection, eco-friendly invention and biodegradable materials. Therefore, it enables people not to destroy the environment further, and the environment can be recovered that human beings can live longer than they expected. In conclusion, although some people argue that money should be spent on research in other planets, I believe that the most important thing is to spend revenue on the protection of the environment and recovering the Earth.
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