■ Direction· Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
· Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
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INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM WRITING ANSWER BOOKLET Candidate Name:텍스트 | Candidate Number:텍스트 | Centre Number:텍스트1 | Date:텍스트1 |
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Topic ▼ some people believe that it is best situation to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. others argue thet it is better to try and improve such situations discuss both these views and give your own opinion. |
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Your Answer ▼ ** 대략적인 점수대를 꼭 알고 싶습니다! 감사합니다 :)
Some people choose to accept a bad situation because the way to improve require too much effort, which can be even more stressful than bearing stress from present situations. Moreover, people should take a risk such as abandoning the money and time in order to change into a new state. It is understandable to pursue ‘safety’ of reality. However, in my opinion, it is much better to try and improve the situation, even if it will be obviously challenging. First of all, the types of stress formed by accepting a bad situation and suffering hardship from process of improving are different. The former is negative, and the latter is positive when it comes to people’s mental health. If they determine to endure without effort, they have no expectation about happy future. Meanwhile, positive stress can be converted into motives of hard-working for own’s one's future. My parents always say “If you avoid challenge of life because of fear to fail, the possibility that you can success is 0.” I had taught middle school students the math, because I have had to gather money. However, it was too tired tiring for me to explain same content again and again. I agonized seriously between the satisfaction of job and the safety source of high salary and choose to apply for HR manager that I was interested in. In other word, I rushed into a risk to fail. Suffering two fails, I finally got into a new company and spend a fascinating day, which I couldn’t experience if I choose to accept the past situation. In my lifetime, I experienced both feeling; the first was ‘Disappointment’, caused by fail after my effort. ‘Regret’, caused by giving up before I’d tried was the second. It is easy to think the first feeling and experience would affect my confidence negatively, however, in fact, regret was still more negative factor to my self-esteem. ‘Challenge to improve my situations’ was always the best choice for me. |
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채점 기준 | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Total |
Score (9점 만점) | 6 | 6 | 6 | 6 | 6 |
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글쓴이 본인의 의견을 근거로 하여 글을 작성해주신 점이 매우 인상적입니다. 그렇지만 제시문에서는 양측의 입장을 모두 비교하고 글쓴이의 의견을 제시하라고 한 만큼 먼저 변화를 위해 노력하는 점에 대한 일반적인 입장을 제시한 후 글쓴이의 입장을 제시해주신다면 훨씬 더 좋은 글이 될 수 있을 것이라고 생각합니다. 수고하셨습니다.