Q.
Some people believe that allowing children
to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and
entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think
about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children
to make decisions about matters that affect them.
A.
It is true that there are many different
ways to raise children. With regards to this, some people say that allowing
children to make their own choice on everyday matters can have a bad influence
on children. On the other hand, the other people say there are those who believe (이렇게 바꾸시면 반복되는 표현을 싹 다 대체할 수 있습니다.) that children’s own decisions
are important for them. This essay will discuss both point of views and my
opinion as well.
There is no doubt that we need an independency
to live as an individual. However, even though this is important in our life,
letting children to make their own choices on every matters is are not a good
idea. This is because it can make them selfishness. In order to avoid this, people
need to learn how to control ourselves because there are many situations that
we are faced with many situations that we cannot do what we want in real life. I
do also believe everything is step by step. Therefore, parents have to teach
patience before allowing their all decisions.
However, it is true that we have to allow children’s
own decisions to a certain extent. In childhood, making decisions cam be helpful
to get to know not only what they like but also what they do not like. If they
know about their preferences, it can be easier to find what they want to be in
the future. Not only this, in order to make making friends, we have to know about
ourselves first. If we do not say our opinion and thoughts, people cannot know
you (이전에도 말씀드렸듯이 2인칭은 따로 쓰지 않습니다. 그리고 그걸 떠나서 지금 인칭의 통일도 되어있지 않은 상황이고요.).
To conclude, I would be cautious to claim
that allowing children’s own decisions on every matters always have a good
influence on children. However, it is needed to a certain extent.
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