[Question]
Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
The topic is saying whether the children under wealthy parents have less ability in solving the problem of adult life. I think my opinion is closer to disagree on this topic.
First of all, a lot of money makes troubles against family members, so it is easier for a child to be exposed to such a mature problem. Such situations will make the kid more mature and he or she will learn much early then the kids who don’t have a problem with money. For example, the rich family members usually fight against who should take the heritage, so It could be stressful for the children and also became an experience of adult problems.
Another reason is that whether the topic sentence is right or wrong just belongs to the child’s personality, and the personality have big relationship with the education he or she receives and the attitude structured by that education. The children from the wealth are more likely to receive a high quality of education and I think that it would result in a mature grown-up.
Also, as the last reason, the poor environment doesn’t actually make the kid mature. Sometimes it makes the child frustrated and even makes them not to choose the right moral way. I saw such examples a lot around me. To be specific, because her family doesn’t have enough money to manage the school fee, one adult who I know gave up going to college when she was about twenty, even she already had the admission from school. After that, she just drank a lot of alcohol. Money likely makes a person’s tendency and choices.
As the end of my writing, I disagree with the topic sentence. I think wealthy and poorness usually doesn’t make the children’s ability to manage the problem of adult life. However, if it affects their ability, my opinion is that wealthy could make the child mature rather than poor environment.
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