The given bar graph illustrates the share of
the UK and Australian cinema market in 2001 and the line graph gives
information about the cinema admission in the UK and Australia between 1976 and
2006.
Overall, it is evident that the US films were (기존 표현도 아예 틀린 건 아닌데, 일반적으로는 이렇게 씁니다. 그냥 참고로만 보세요~) was
most popular in the United Kingdom, as well as Australia. Furthermore, and Australians who bought the cinema admission
increased from 1976 to 2006, but the figure was always lower than that of the UK.
Looking at the graph more closely, one can
see that the US film was the highest in both countries, at more than 65
percent, in both countries. Also, the UK films are more popular than Australian
ones in the UK. In contrast, other films were higher than Australian and the UK films
in Australia, this figure was almost four times, at around 17 percent in 2001.
As for the cinema admission, the UK figure significantly fluctuated, starting
from more than 100 million in 1975 to less than 160 million in 2005. While, in In
1985, this peaked at the lowest point at approximately 46 million. In Australia,
the figure also fluctuated, but gradually grew grow to around 80 million in 2005.
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