Your Answer ▼Some people believe that the nation’s economic
affluence is directly proportional to the amount of working time. However, I am
not in favor of this opinion because other factors affect this relation. My
argument’s premise is that people’s wages represent the total countries’ wealth.
To begin with, the nations which have
numerous occupations that require less work time but are productive are economically
developed. People who have the jobs which need a great deal of professional
knowledge create a lot of money and work less relatively. For example, while
demanding and repetitive labors such as employees in factories (그 중에서도 생산직 등으로 조금 구체화해주시는 게 좋아보입니다.) get lower
salaries, experts in some fields such as a doctor or s lawyer create a lot of
money in a short work time. The countries with a large distribution of these
kinds of jobs are more likely to be economically wealthy.
On top of that, even if people work the
same time, their nation’s wealth can be vary depending on what kinds of
positions they are in charge of. The more important role they play, the higher opportunity
for them to earn more money. For example, assuming the import of products from a
third country, it is undeniable that the labors who work in the factories in a developing
country earn less money than employees who manage the overall stage of the
import in the developed country. This shows that the amount of money changes
depending on which part of the process a person is responsible for. (현재 두 본론은 어느정도 겹치는 요소가 있기 때문에, 보다 확실한 차별화를 주실 필요가 있습니다.)
In conclusion, even though people think
that the saying “the more work, the more earn” makes sense, it is not
necessarily right because other factors give huge influences on their correlation.
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