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It is true that we can see that some countries
are facing an the obesity issue and many people are losing their health balance
because of their wrong food consumptions with neglecting to do some regular
exercises. I think that this problem can be minimized by government’s proper
action.
Most individuals probably do not realize
that they have a bad eating habit in their lives. To illustrate this, people
can eat fast foods and prepared meals, which contain too much fat and
carbohydrates, because it is not only tasty, but also easy to eat everywhere. This
can cause weight gaining quickly. Another reason is that people also are not
aware of their health can get worse than before because of using many
technological devices in a daily life. For example, 90 percent of people are
users of mobile phones and tablet PCs, and therefore, they might spend too much of
time to use those without going out. It could bring an addiction of spending time
with electronic products sitting all day long. <(기기를 너무 많이 사용한다 보다는 기기를 사용 하는게 왜 나쁜지에 대해 focus를 해주시면 더 좋을 것 같습니다.) Clearly, it causes many different
diseases, and people lose a healthy body balance eventually.
However, there are two measures that people can take to overcome <(measures를 overcome한다는 점이 어색하게 들립니다) obesity the overweight and health issues. Firstly, governments can increase
the amount of price of instant food. As a result, people, particularly, young
children, cannot eat fast food regularly as they cannot afford to pay for it
easily. Secondly, releasing an advertisement and healthy program on media can
be helpful for people who are overweight and are not going out frequently. These
surely can encourage people to change their bad habits. For instance, a successful person, who has lost weight and now live healthy life can on media,
introduces some physical activities that can help people’s metabolic rates and
plus nutritious food. This can be beneficial to become healthy and change their
eating habits.
In conclusion, nowadays people are
struggling with an unhealthy life as they consume too much instant meals and do
not exercises regularly, however, it can be fixed by an action from the government
with releasing advertisements and programs about healthy life to help those
people.
Score: 7 Comment: 질문에 대한 답은 아주 좋다고 생각합니다. 다만 전체적으로 글ㅈ 얼리가 필요합니다. 수고 하셨습니다.
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