Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In young age, perspective for own decision is not yet formed, because it is the time to form the identity of children. Thus, the decision of what to do, learn or practice are usually made by their parents based on both their thoughts and the advices from specialists like educationalists. With corresponding reason, some of them argue that it is good to teach how to play a musical instrument to every child, and I agree with their opinion. (서두가 불필요하게 길긴 했는데, 6.5 선에서 그렇게 중요하지는 않습니다. 그래도 가급적이면 본론에 집중해주세요!) In this essay, I will discuss the reason about my thoughts in details.
The first reason to support my agreement is that various (이거 학생들이 많이 틀리므로 주의해주셔야 합니다.) variety experiences helps kids to build up what types of person they are. To know what people either like or not to be in the specific aspect, experience is the only way. Children will get more busy, as they grow up are grown up to teenager and adult, so, it's good to experience various things when they have time. Playing an instrument in young age is matched with both time condition and experience in particular aspect.
Another reason is that music helps children to prove their personality in positive path. For instance, each music has its own theme and atmosphere that it wants that itself want to express, and listeners can directly feel it, especially when the mood of both music and listener matches. Playing the instrument is a form of music as well, so players have to convey the mood of music on the play. Expression of the children is being expanded, by playing musics with different types of atmosphere.
In conclusion, I agree with some educationalists' advice which is that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument because it helps make the process of forming one's identity solid. Besides, the expression of children will be extended through the experience of different form of mood.
9월에 개학후 할것이 갑자기 밀려와 한동안 essay를 못썼어요. 그래도 모범답안 분석 및 어휘 공부는 꾸준히 해 왔고 앞으로도 이것들은 꾸준히 하려고 노력중입니다.
총평: (6/7/7/6) 6.5
네 지니님, 말씀해주신대로 모범답안+어휘+문법이 제일 중요합니다. 특히 어휘+문법은 라이팅 외에도 나중에 유학생활 때 도움이 될 거에요.
참고로 최근에 6.5로 졸업한 학생들이 2~3분 있었는데, 해당 학생들은 지니님과 실력이 거의 비슷했습니다. 고로 지니님도 이번 시험에서는 긴장없이 실력 발휘만 잘 하시면 충분히 6.5 가능할 거에요.
수고하셨습니다 :)