Nowadays many countries have
very cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can the
government ensure that all these people can live together harmoniously?(
As time goes by, people have been moved into another country to find a new life, settle one country, make a family, and eventually form a cosmopolitan city such as New York and Toronto. According to the changes in the world, the question has inevitably followed, of how can the governments make people live together harmoniously has inevitably followed. (의문형은 따로 쓰지 않는다고 보시면 됩니다.)? Still, it has been argued what the solution is. Likewise, I will argue about the possible solutions in this essay.
First, we need to know what factors could cause/bring make disharmony between people. By then, the difference in one’s education is obviously the most likely possibility. For example, In in China, nations are forced to learn histories under the government’s control. After all, it It often causes dissonance and sometimes transforms into a sense of phobia. Therefore, education is considered the most important factor that the government should ensure. Furthermore, education is one way to treat racism. No wonder racism is the most serious issue what human society encounters. However, in fact, racism is likely to occur due to ignorance, the poor level of education.
Another thing the government should ensure is to make a workplace for immigration and foreigners. Yet, many employees who are foreigners or immigrations are still differentiated because of their race and status. If there were no place for immigration, how could the world be harmonious? (여기도 의문문으로 쓰이지 않도록 수정해주시면 됩니다.) Therefore, the government should amend amends the law to work regardless of race, gender, and nationality.
In conclusion, it seems to me that there are at least two ways to ensure the level of harmony in one’s society.
총평: (7/6/6/7) 6.5
지금은 연설문의 대본을 쓰는 과정이 아니기 때문에, 기본적으로 구어에 해당하는 의문형은 따로 안 쓴다고 보시면 돼요. 물론 간혹가다가 예외가 있지만, 9점 목표하는 경우가 아닌 이상 거기까지는 안 들어가는 게 낫습니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)