The graph show the proportions of males and females doing physical activity regularly in various age groups in Australia in 2010. Overall, the significant gap between male and female appears in the group of the age 35 to 44 and the percentage of male in 15 to 24 account for the highest rate among the categories while female in 45 to 54 take the most portion of them. (여기는 세부적인 분석에 해당하고, Overview에서는 '가장 어린 나이대의 그룹을 제외하고는 모두 여성의 수치가 남성의 수치보다 높았다.' 라고 한 줄만적고 넘기시면 됩니다.)
The most notable feature is the fact that the biggest gap between males and females is in the age group of 35 to 44 (39.5%, 52.5%, respectively). In addition, it is measured similar rate at the age group 65 and over. (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.) The percentage of females represent higher numbers than that of males in most groups.
The trend of females draw upward and drop after hitting the peak at the age of 45 to 54 by 53.3% while the percentage of male goes down until 39.5% 39/5% in the age group of 35 to 44 and start to increase. The highest rate in males is 52.8% which is in the group of 15 to 24 and in female is 53.3% in 45 to 54.
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