The diagram below show the manufacturing process of olive oil of different stages.
summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons
where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates the process of producing concentrated olive oil for sale selling.
Overall, there are twelve stages in the process of making olive oli, starting from harvesting fresh olives and ending with the
packaging of three different types of olive oil.
To begin with, olives are harvested and then the best olives are selected by workers from the olive garden. At the next stage,
the olives are delivered to collection vat which sends them to the washer tank. During the process, the olives are de-leafed
and washed. After this, they are passed to the olive mill where they are crushed. At the second phase of, olive paste is heated
to 27 degrees in a malaxer and the paste is supplied to the centrifugal press to extract pomance or pulp residue before being delivered delivering
it to another mill where olive pomance oil packed.
This step is followed by the decantation and separation process where fresh liquid oil is stored in a large oil storage tank.
Finally, extra virgin olive oil and virgin olive oil are produced by filtration, while refined olive oil is made through refining. (이 마지막 두 문단의 경우 이렇게 나누면 안 될 것 같아보이긴 하는데...표가 없어서 확답을 드리지는 못하겠네요! 표가 첨부된 상태로 글을 수정해서 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.)
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