Some people say that Ebooks and modern
technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines. To what
extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a disagreement regarding the issue
of whether or not Ebooks and cutting-edge technology will replace traditional
newspapers and magazines. Some people agree that Ebooks will utterly substitute
traditional newspapers and magazines while others disagree with it. Personally,
I support the former for two reasons.
Firstly, electronic books are more
convenient than traditional newspapers and magazines because they can store a
lot of books and be edited easily. For example, traditional books account for a
large space to store like bookshelves, so it is hard to move and conserve them.
However, Ebooks can be stored into just a one hand size device with the size of a single hand, so it can save
tons of (전형적인 구어에 해당하므로 대체해주시는 게 좋습니다.) books and does not need any space to store. Also, it is difficult to
revise or amend content on traditional magazines, but electronic books can be
easily edited. Therefore, they can make people save their time and costs to
revise the content on books.
Second, it is beneficial to conserve the
environment by using Ebooks. Since traditional newspapers and magazines need a
lot of paper, so many trees are being cut down and it results in the devastation of devastating
forests. It is well known that massive forests are being destroyed by people in order to produce for
producing paper every day. However, if electronic books totally replace
traditional books, it does which do not need any paper to be published, can totally replace traditional books. Thus, we can
save and preserve forests more than now. Also, it is possible that more
beautiful environments will be handed over to our offspring, so they can live
without environmental problems.
In conclusion, I insist that Ebooks and
modern technology will replace traditional newspaper and magazines because it
can be easily stored and edited. Plus, people can preserve the environment by
using electronic books, so Ebooks will be substituted to traditional books.
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