Teenagers have problems at home and school. What difficulties are they facing now? What should parents and schools do to help them? (2/22)
-> As increasing use of the Internet easily in teenage With the increasing use of the Internet, many adolescent go through some problems at home or school. There are already many problems in to teenagers, but, in this essay, I would say that the smartphone leads to the most i would say about the smartphone lead to detrimental effects to them.
No one can deny that the smartphone causes many problems in home environment and school. First of all, parents tend to let their child watch the cellphone even during dinner time, and naturally the time to have conversation with family is decreasing.
Secondly, bringing a smartphone to school can disturb students from studying can not concentrate their study. The physical activities in school have been decreasing, and the reason is because the students tend to play the game on their smartphone rather than playing football. Even though some schools have already announced that banning use smartphone at school, teenagers still take and use their cellphone in class.
Third, the students without a smartphone are bullied from the students who taking a smartphone. In other words, it is more and more difficult that building friendship without smartphone.
In conclusion, we should impose the strict regulation to teenagers who spend over time on using too much time using their cellphone. In home, they might use the smartphone set-time and place, the parent spend lots of time on having a conversation as well. In addition, at the school, the students should be are obligated to give a phone as soon as arrive the school . And (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 못합니다.) the teachers should make effort to find a new way for students to focus on their class by using diverse contents such as YouTube youtube or game character. (254words)
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