The bar graph compares
the number of internet users in three nations and the average number across the
world from 1998 and 2013.
Overall, it is
clear the number of people who use the internet of all groups increased constantly
during the given period. Especially, they nearly doubled their figures in 2003.
Looking at the graph more closely, Canada had the highest number of internet users at the first while internet users in Denmark were second with just over 20000. However, at the year 2003, Denmark’s figure overtook that for Canada and it remained as the largest group over the whole period. There was a considerable increase in Greece also. In 1998, Greece had the lowest figure but it shot up in 2003, reaching around 60000 at the end of the period. Whereas, the world average showed a relatively slow rise; it’s number was only half of what Greece was in 2013.
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마지막 문장에서 whereas는 접속사여서 저렇게 쓰면 안 된다는 걸 다 쓰고 난 후에야 사전 찾아보고 알았네요. compared to the others, the world average showed ~라고 하면 맞을까요?
task 1은 항상 시간이 오버되서 걱정이네요ㅠㅠ 항상 첨삭 감사합니다! :)