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The graph which include the information about people's coffee and tea purchasing and drinking habits in five different Australian cities.
We can immediately notice that four out of five cities' people usually rely on a cafe to buy some coffee or tea. Moreover, people who live in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart spend more money to buy coffee or tea compared to Brisbane and Adelaide.
First of all, most people in each city often visit a cafe for buying some beverages such as coffee or tea. The proportions of going to the cafe for purchasing coffee or tea in four cities except Adelaide are higher than the proportions of purchasing fresh and instant coffee.
Secondly, people in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart show more frequent buying coffee and tea habit than two other cities respectively Brisbane and Adelaide. The percentages of buying fresh coffee in last 4 weeks in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart are approximately 44%, 42% and 37% respectively. These three proportions are higher than other two cities' percentages of purchasing fresh coffee in last 4 weeks. Likewise, other two given subjects illustrate similar phenomenon with the section about purchasing fresh coffee in last 4 weeks.