시간은 약간 오버(22분)된거같고 11월 초에 시험볼 예정입니다, 6.5가 목표입니다!
The bar chart indicates employment figures in different tourism-related industries between 2009 to 2019. The calibration of data is done in number.
Overall, the major segments of the chart show an upward trend. The number of employments in culture declined slightly whilst those of the other 4 sectors increased. Interestingly, the pattern is the opposite trend in other industries.
In more detail, Sports sports has increased in employment (이런 식으로, 정확하게 적어주셔야 합니다. 다른데에도 이렇게+이와 다른 다양한 방식으로 바꿔주세요!) considerably by 2019, and thus sports reached to the highest place of the chart in 2019. Likewise, a similar pattern was seen in food that has increased from about 283 thousand (이거 싹 다 붙여주셔야 합니다. 다른데에도 마찬가지이고요.) to 358. In 2009, The hotel temporarily remained at the top, but sports overtook it due to the level of growth in 2019. Surprisingly, travel has increased approximately from approximately 61 to 112 by 2019, which has almost doubled its number of employments. Although travel has the biggest increase, it showed was the lowest portion of the chart. In contrast, there were slight decreases in culture.
총평: (6/7/7/6) 6.5
일단 김주작님의 경우 기본적인 영어 실력이 충분히 갖춰져있는 상황이라 6.5 정도는 괜찮을 겁니다. 제가 말씀드리는 단위 등에서의 요령만 잘 갖춰주시면 더 안정적인 6.5, 그리고 낮은 확률로 7.0도 가능해보이고요.
표 문제에서 제일 중요한 건 단위입니다. 항상 수치를 작성할 때 단위가 정확하게 갖춰져있는지 확인해주세요!
수고하셨습니다 :)