[TASK-2]
13 Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists and not local people. Why is the case? What can be done to attract local people?
; 많은 박물관 유적지는 여행객이 주로 방문한다. 왜 현지인은 방문을 안하고 여행객만 갈까? 현지인에게 인기를 끄려면 어떻게 해야할까
인트로- 사회적 이슈 중 하나. 여행지에 여행객만 방문, 현지인들은 안감.
바디1(이유)- 다양한 박물관, 유적지는 포커스가 여행객에 맞춰져있다. 저렴한 가격에 여러곳을 한번에 가는 프로모션을 받아서 가면 저렴,
근데 현지인들에겐 메리트가 없다.
바디2(해결책)- 할인정책, 주중 할인
These days, there are numerous historical sites and museums which many people are visiting over the world. However, people visiting those sites are mainly tourists, not local people. For this reason, this essay will demonstrate the reason of this issue and solutions.
First of all, most touring programs such as visiting museums and historical sites have been focused on tourists. Tourism is one of the major industries today, so many governments and countries are making an effort to attract people outside in order to visit their attractions as well as increase economical profits. For this reason, a number of promotions are combined with visiting various historical sites and other attractions. If tourists visit a foreign some country, they normally search for a reasonable tour course which is affordable and to visit many places at once. This would make local people have no interest, because not only they have enough time to get attractions there, but also they do not have thoughts for visiting many places at once.
To attract local people to visit their historical sites and museums, useful promotions for them are necessary. One of the efficient ways is to provide discounts for local people. Most tourists spend their weekend to visit attractions. In this regard, a number of promotions are provided to local people such as visiting museums and historical sites on weekdays. It can bring about increased attention from local people and activate local economy. Besides, providing huge discounts and educated materials to the local students when they visit sites would be an efficient way to resolve this issue.
Overall, there is issue that many museums and historical sites are visited by a number of tourists. To attract local people to visit, providing promotions for them is necessary to resolve this issue (to attract~~과 중복됩니다.). (288 words, 40 mins)
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