More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?
One of the biggest challenges we face today is how to protect wild animals that are dying out and manage a list of endangered animals. It has generally been shown that humans should try to live side by side with non-human species. This essay will show two main causes of this environmental problem and suggest effective measures.
Concern about the issue of extinct wild animals has become more severe in recent years because of global trends such as illegal capture and local factors including indiscriminate use of resources. One of the major causes is that people capture wild animals illegally. They believe that animal’s organs such as the liver are good for their health. In some countries, it is very common to trade caught catch animals.
The second reason is that there is no place for animals to live in. Humans use the amount of natural resources and create a vast trash. As a result, the land inhabited by animals is polluted and decreased. For instance, the melting amount of glaciers is increasing rapidly every year.
There are several actions that government could take to solve the problems described above. Firstly, a simple solution would be to make a strict bill. Also, people's awareness is needed to be improved and also need to improve people’s awareness. with a strong bill, government can be know nature and animal’s importance through mass media. (얘는 그대로 bill 뒤로 옮겨주시면 됩니다.) (+여기서 엔터는 따로 치지 않습니다.)
The second measure would be for government to improve a high tax on waste disposal. In Korea, people have to pay for a garbage bag and throw it away.
To sum up, society should immediately deal with this issue of extinct wild animals by creating effective policies that implement solutions that are centered on factors such as strong legislation and a high tax.
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