The
pie chart shows various destinations of Anthropology graduates from one
university after finishing their degree course and the table indicates the
proportion of Anthropologists’ salaries after 5 years’ work.
Overall,
one can see that a majority of graduates are employed either as a full-time worker (이런 경우에는 생략 가능합니다.) or part-time worker. In addition, the salaries of Anthropology graduates after
5 years’ work differ depending depends on the type of employment from 25 thousand to more
than 100 thousand dollars.
Looking
at the pie chart, a category of full-time work accounts for the highest
proportion at 52 percent. Next, 15 percent of graduates are part-time workers
while there are 12 percent of graduates who do not have any job. Those who study
postgrad in full time and combine part-time work with postgrad study are 8 percent
and 5 percent, respectively. (여기서 엔터 한 번 더 치시면 됩니다.)
Next, according to the table, one can see that
Anthropologists who work in government sector earn the most salaries among all
categories, while those who work in private companies earn the least. In the government
sector, people whose salary is more than 75 thousand dollars comprise 80
percent and the same is true of freelance consultants. On the other hand, only
55 percent of employees who work in private companies earn more than 75 thousand
dollars, and 10 percent of employees earn less than 50 thousand dollars. (시간 단축은 이 마지막 두 문단에서 해주시면 됩니다. 표에 있는 모든 수치를 다루려고 하지 않아도 돼요.)
글자수 : 222
시간 : 20분
목표 : 6.5~7.0
지난번에 올린 것인데 overview가 빠졌다고 지적해주셔서 overview를 넣어서 다시 올려봅니다. 도표를 접하면 그냥 머릿속이 하얘지네요..20분 안에 다 쓰는 것만으로 벅찬데 걱정입니다ㅜ
총평: 이렇게만 시간 내에 쓰시면 6.5~7.0은 충분히 확보 가능합니다. 물론, 다시 쓰신 글이라는 점도 고려해야겠지만, 자잘한 오류를 제외하고 보면 전반적으로 어휘, 문법 등에서 깔끔한 편이었어요. 도표를 막 통계학과 박사과정을 거친 학생들처럼 깔끔하게 분석하려고 할 필요 없습니다. 그냥 눈에 띄는 친구들, 예외적인 친구들 위주로 잘 요약해주시면 돼요. 너무 걱정 마세요~표 분석보다는 어휘+문법이 우선입니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)