■ DirectionYou have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.■ QuestionSummarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
|
|
|
INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM WRITING ANSWER BOOKLET Candidate Name:텍스트 | Candidate Number:텍스트 | Centre Number:텍스트1 | Date:텍스트1 |
|
|
Topic ▼
Company Survey Your company is thinking of creating a facility in one of its floors. The Human Resources Department of your company is surveying your opinion on what to have. The major question is whether the company should build a gym or a child care center. Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words. Option A: Gym: This gym would include a basketball court, exercising equipment, and shower rooms. Option B: Child care center: This center would include a playground, a green area, and some classrooms.
|
|
|
Your Answer ▼
It would be very beneficial for us to have either a gym or a child care center in the company. However, in my opinion, a child care center would be more useful and could satisfy more employees. There are two reasons why I think so.
One reason is that our company could diverse employee benefits by providing a company child care centre. Currently, our company reimburses a gym membership as an employee benefit while they do not support child care expenses. An on-site child care centre would make employees who have children happy not only for saving child care expenses but also for seeing their children running through a large playground and a clean green area and receiving a good quality of eduction in new classrooms in the same building with them.
The other reason is that an on-site child care centre would protect many workers from quitting the company. For many people, their day-care expense is as high as their salary. In this situation, one of parents usually quits their job and takes care of their children at home. Therefore, our company could help people remain at the company by offering a company child centre at affordable price.
With the aforementioned reasons, I am in favour of having an on-site child care center. |
|
|
EXAMINER’S USE ONLY | Total Score: /9 | Examiner: | | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Score | /9 | /9 | /9 | /9 |
|
|
|
|
1월에 첨삭받았던 거 다시 한번 써봤습니다.
좀 더 나아졌는지ㅠㅠ
다시 시험치는 김에 레벨 9 받고 싶습니다. 모범답안 보고 있는데 실전에서는 그렇게 유려하게 잘 나오지를 않네요ㅠㅠ
https://www.gohackers.com/?c=ielts/ielts_info2/ielts_writing&type=url&where=nic&keyword=YOOL&uid=475426