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Many people are working a vast amount of time and get paid to make their life more better. Some people believe that working long hours could be happy even though they have very little time for leisure. However, others argue that the people devoting their time to work would not be content in their life due to the lack of leisure activities. In my opinion, the consumption of time for their leisure is necessary for a better life.
First of all, numerous people have already been tired and exhausted since starting modern society. People are industrious for their work and have a belief which their life could get be getting better. However, ('과한' 으로 수식해주시면 더 좋습니다.) devotion to of their work cause them to ruin their lives. Even if they can get a tremendous amount of money, they will not have time to get some rests and afford to do leisure activities. For example, the people who have no time to do any activities are not energetic and depressed, which causes occurs mental decease like insomnia.
Secondly, People people are able to concentrate on their work by getting enough rests and doing leisure activities. Leisure activities could provide not only passions concerning their work but also improve their loyalty of their company. These aspects can impact people to that people do individual tasks effectively and are make them creative and innovative. For example, many global companies already have encouraged their staff to have their time for leisure activities, and that made the best companies around the world.
To conclude, having lesser time for leisure activities is not effective to live a good life to do people activities is not effective way to have good lives. Many people want to have a well-balanced life and more companies need to consider giving time to enjoy activities for the staff.
단어수는 295개, 시간은 39분 입니다. 말씀드렸다시피 6.5이구요. 조언해주신 대로 지금 문법과 어휘공부는 틈틈히 시간이 안나더라도 조금씩 하고 있는 중입니다. 항상 조언 감사드립니다!!!
네 Joe님, 그게 진짜 귀찮고 힘들 때도 있겠지만, 그래도 기본기 다지는데에는 그만한 게 없습니다. 파이팅이에요 :)
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