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Some group of people claim that universities should
accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. I totally
disagree with that. This essay will highlights on reasons why I disagree with
the opinion.
To begin with, the people who claim universities
should accept male and female by equal numbers say said it is for gender equality.
In my opinion, that is not a problem of gender equality at all. When students consider considering their major, they choose subjects on their own talent and interest,
not on their gender. For this reason, division of students by gender is
meaningless.
Furthermore, it (문단에 처음 등장하는 대상이 대명사로 쓰여서는 안 됩니다. 밑의 문단도 마찬가지이고요.) can limits students’ choice. For
instance, there is a male student who wants to study engineering in university
but the university should accept equal number of male and female even the
proportion of male applicants is much more than female. If this situation
happened, he might needs extremely high marks compare to ~성별 배분이 없는 상황 rather than before. It might makes
him to get lower standard of education as well.
Moreover, it is also harmful for university. It forces
university to accept students with low marks or low abilities ability just because they there
are male or female. It might reduce the university’s standard of student’s
ability. It could influence other students in a to negative way.
To conclude, to accept equal numbers of male and
female students is not only harmful for students but also affects universities
to negative way. For these reasons, I fully disagree with the opinion.
(242 words)
많이 쓰려고 노력했느데 아쉽게 242단어네요. 다음에는 꼭 250단어 넘기게 쓰겠습니다. 쓰는데는 30분 좀넘게 걸렸고요 사전은 두세번 정도 확인했습니다. 그리고 종이에서 옮겨서 타이핑할떄 어색한 부분 좀 고쳐서 썼어요.
task1 에 쓴거처럼 목표점수는 6.5 ~ 7.0 이고요 시험은 12월 5일입니다. 항상 감사합니다!
네 피자님, 참고로 지금 단계에서는 시간 재는 게 그리 중요하진 않습니다. 다음 한 주는 시간 재지 말고, 어떤 글을 쓰든 각각 160자/270~80자를 쓸 수 있게 연습해주세요. 시간 재는 건 분량이 확보된 이후에나 하는 겁니다.
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