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Some people claim that films are is not that important compared to other forms of arts such as literature and painting. However, I believe that whichever form of art is important. In This essay will discuss the importance of literature and painting as well as films. (Need better transition) Literature and painting are important. They provide an artistic work that enhances people’s expansion in their creative thinking. Each literature piece of work and paintings is are aiming to deliver the writers and painter’s emotions and story lines. By reading a great book such as Shakespeare or looking at the great painting such as Picasso, people try to study them and for the relaxation. All those work have meanings and showing the stories of history behind of their work. (Need better transition) This is similar for films as most of techniques <(what techniques?) are combined for creating one film. So films are the master piece of all artistic work. Majority of movies are involve of various artistic works such as from writing the story to create all the movie characters to become lively and having a distinct personality, controlling gently with the camera’s focusing and adjusting, harmonizing the music with the scene appropriately and appropriately providing the story line behind the scene. <(Need to elaborate more) In conclusion, like how literature and painting are important, films are also important. All the necessary techniques to be used in literature and paintings are included in making a movie. Therefore, movies are the final product of all techniques.
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