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Several languages are becoming getting extinct every year. Despite the
convenience in communication by having a single language in the world, it will
be inevitable to lose the language-related positions as well as tradition. <(질문에 대한 답이 조금 더 clear 하면 좋을 것 같습니다)
When the world is having a single language, it will be beneficial
from the free of language barriers. By having a major language only, it will
be easier to communicate between countries. People can communicate directly
without spending the time to learn another language or hiring translators. In
the case of immigrants or the people from developing countries, they can work
anywhere around the world because the world has a common language is having the common language.
Despite the easier communication, several occupations related to communications will be lost such as translators, archaeologists, interpreters, language teachers, and linguistics. If language related occupations disappears, the people within that position will become unemployed. Since they are specialised in language, they might have having difficulties in finding another positions; thus it could result in long term unemployment. In addition, the language loss means is meaning the cultural loss. The language is derived from one's history and culture. If Korean language is gone, meaning all the Korean representative culture and tradition such as K-pop and Korean drama will be gone. <Need better coherence> In the case of Korean drama, "Descendants of the Sun", the language could not be translated completely to Chinese, because Korean language has the unique meanings behind its intonation. <(내용을 조금 더 summarize 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다)
In conclusion, although a single language would break the
communication barriers between the countries, the language related occupations
and the cultural loss of country is more damaging more than beneficial.
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