Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.
Why might this be the case?
What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Many people these days prefer to run their own businesses instead of applying or working at the corporations. The structure of society has been changed for many years today, and this construction, such as online platforms, allows (여기 포함 띄어쓰기 문제가 가끔 보이는데, 그냥 없다고 가정하고 채점하겠습니다. 실전에서는 다르니까 주의해주세요!) people to be able to work themselves as a freelancer and founding a small venture enterprise.
Employees get heavy stress on their workplaces for several reasons. Workers have to obey the boss even in conditions that they think are unreasonable status they think. Moreover, even the laborious work levels whether they enjoy it or not regardless of whether they enjoy the laborious work levels or not, monthly wages commonly are low. These factors have led to getting stress doubled and made them move to the trend of being self-employed make move to being self-employed trends. Workers in The the typical example at present is definitely YouTube (밑의 T도 대문자화해주시면 됩니다. 크게 중요한 건 아니지만요.) Youtube. Thanks to this platform, many people are able to acquire huge returns by making videos involved in their interests and sharing ones. This allows so-called ‘Youtubers’ to have huge profits with less stress relatively.
In terms of self-business, a few cases indeed show some people who have a great success economically and it is common to watch on the Internet their lectures conveying success stories on the Internet (어순은 가급적이면 꼬아서 적지 마세요~), which promotes others to jump in those fields. However, people should not overlook there are many hardships and drawbacks as they have plans of being self-employed. When it comes to employing oneself, certainly various hurdles would disrupt. The biggest drawback might be that nothing protects from fata risks. Having no regular income leads to unstable economic status so it is hard to measure how long it can sustain with limited resources until this business meets great success. These days, the news keeps informing the severe situation of self-employed due to Covid-19. To survive under unexpected situations by oneself would give owners a sense of despair, since self-employers have to shoulder all responsibility.
In conclusion, There there are myriad possibilities to grow higher as a leader of one’s own business rather than engaging as one of the parts in a big organization. However, unless having a strong enough determination and responsibility to run, it would be too risky to start.
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