Today, parents are not close to their children compared to the past. What do you think the reasons are?
Suggest some solutions that they can be closer.
In modern society, the relationship between
parents and their children is not as close as they used to be. In this essay, I
will discuss some of the reasons and suggest some of the solutions.
As developing of IT industrialization, children
have exposed rapidly various media such as surf the internet and social network
service so children spend a lot of time using cellphone. They are more likely
to less bond with their parents. In addition, a lot of children have pressure to
being high achiever nowadays. Therefore, they need to go to academic after
school due to get high score like English and mathematics that the society
wants them to.
However, there are some of the key to being
close between parents and children. First of all, parents need to have interest
in what children’s interest. It would be helpful to have conversation and
understand each other. Therefore, they are more likely to feel strong tie.
Furthermore, when they have time on weekend, they need to make an effort to
spend time together away from daily life. Parents play a prominent role in
children’s development so if they go to camping or hiking which they can stick
together the children will feel affection from parents. I believe that spending
time with parents would have effect on their child’s development.
We get into problems which not close
between parent and child by living busy modern society. There is no doubt that
parents and children would be closer if they consider their kids.
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