The table below gives information about government expenditure in five sectors relating to domestic policy in Germany, Italy, and the United Kingdom in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
[Government spending by sector (2009)]
Germany | Italy | UK | |
Public Service | 6.6% | 8.6% | 4.6% |
Economic affairs | 4.0% | 4.5% | 4.4% |
Environmental protection | 0.7% | 0.9% | 1.0% |
Health | 7.1% | 7.5% | 7.8% |
Education | 4.3% | 4.6% | 6.4% |
The table illustrates how governments in Germany, Italy, and UK spent their expenditure for the social service in 2009.
Overall, it is clear that the expenditure of three countries for the environmental protection was the lowest as all the figures were was lower than 1 percent. However, Germany and UK spent the most on health sector, accounting for 7.1% and 7.8% respectively whereas public service accounted for the largest portion of total expenditure in Italy. (참고로 Overview에서는 구체적인 수치가 들어가서는 안 됩니다. 구체적인 수치는 밑에서 실컷 언급해주시면 돼요.)
Looking at the chart more closely, one can see that Germany's expenditure for health section was over 7 percent as other two countries did, 7.5% and 7.8% respectively. Public service took the second largest portion with 6.6 percent. In the case of Italy, it consumed similar amount of money around 4 percent for the economic affairs and education service in 2009. Lastly, United Kingdom spent the most for health service, which that was more than 7 times higher the cost for environment protection.
총: 152 글자
시간: 20 분 전에 완료
목표 점수: 받아야 하는건 6.0 이상이지만 6.5 받고 싶습니다 ㅠㅠ
급하게 써서 실수가 많네요 ㅠㅠ
첨삭 정말 감사드립니다.
총평: (6/6/6/7) 6.5
일단 6.0은 큰 변수가 없는 한 무조건 받으실 거고, 지금 글만 봐서는 6.5도 충분히 가능해보이긴 합니다. 단, 6.5에 대해서는 제가 글을 몇 개 더 봐야 확답을 드릴 수 있을 것 같아요.
숫자를 쓰실 때 6.6 percent라고 쓰셔도 되고, 6.6%라고 쓰셔도 됩니다. 대신 하나를 골랐으면 그걸 글 내내 유지할 수 있어야 해요. 지금처럼 왔다갔다하면 안 됩니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)