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The public
perception on youth crime does not take it seriously than that of showing in
reality. Some media or politicians would not represent the full data of the
seriousness of youth crimes happening around the country. The cause of
juvenile crimes can be vary. It could be caused by unsupervised parents or
uncontrollable emotion. Juveniles who are left alone for an extended period of
time, they are at a high risk for committing a crime. They could join street
gangs and have drugs or alcohol problems. As a result, these juveniles may
commit serious crimes. Majority young children are a victim of emotions. They
are unable to control their body since they are immature. The children who are
unable to control their emotion, physics or those who had experienced of sexual abuses
are at a higher risk of committing commit a criminal offense. There are a variety various types of
crimes such as theft, vandalism, graffiti, rob, murder, and arson. 설명 내용이 너무 비약적입니다. 감정의 피해자라거나 홀로 남겨진 아이들이 갱단에 가입한다는 식의 표현은 너무 과장되었다는 느낌을 줍니다. 인과관계를 분명히 정리하거나 출처가 분명한 자료를 인용하는 형태로 정리해보시면 좋을 것 같습니다. Media is just the
messenger to the public. However, which some constructions of news have been said to
set the agenda and form the public opinion. Individuals consume news reports,
advertisements, obtain information on political campaigns and make choices
about consumer products based on the information received through the mass
media, consequently forming our opinions on the issue and acting accordingly.
For those who lack direct contact with young people, it is easy to see how
attitudes are shaped by external sources of information such as tabloid
newspapers and TV reporting. Due to some media reported the tip of the iceberg,
people would not recognise the seriousness of juvenile crimes. In order to
counteract this ignorance it is important for communities to bring together communities, so
that perceptions are based on direct personal experiences, rather than on
understated media representations. Politicians also
do not recognise the serious problems with youth crime crimes despite the increasing its rates. Politicians want to be seen as doing something about youth crimes
during the election periods. Therefore, they do not care about the people's
safety because they are more interested in the result of elections. Politicians
can introduce harsh punishment for juveniles by putting criminals in the prison
in order to acquire the citizen's trust. The hardline policy of locking a huge number numbers of the youth can be impossible to achieve, because this can be solved by
assisting with other parties such as education, society, local communities,
parents and finance.
In conclusion, it
is the fact that, the youth crime is increasing every year. Politicians and
media do not show the threat of youth criminals to the public for the
prevention of chaos in society. Therefore, However, the problem of youth crime should can be
solved by society, media and governmental reactions. Dealing with this problem will require a
two-pronged approach. By giving continuous continous attention to the young people would
divert them away from criminal activities. That will reduce the incidence of
youth crimes. On another level, because the youth requires require the attention, the
degree of attention can be provided by education, media, parents and society.
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