The first graph shows the economic value of students from abroad in the US in the year 2005, 2010, and 2015. The second graph illustrates the number of international student from China, India, and South Korea in the year 2005 and 2015.
(이 위치에 Overview를 넣어주셔야 합니다.)
It is clear that the economic value of international students in America slightly increased from $10.1 billion in 2005 to $15.6 billion in 2010. Interestingly, economic value of students abroad in the US dramatically increased from 2010 to 2015. The economic value in 2015 was almost twice (almost twice라고 적을 경우 두 배 이하라는의미가 되어버립니다. 그러나 두 배 이상이기 때문에 적절하지 않고요.) the figure in 2010. These figures were $35.8 billion and $15.6 billion, respectively.
It is observed that in 2005, the number of Chinese students was the lowest among other nations. The figure was approximately 50,000. However, the figure skyrocketed to roughly 350,000 in 2015. In addition, the number of students from South Korea in 2005 was roughly equal to the figure in 2015 at approximately 100,000.
총평: 일단 표가 액박이라 점수를 빼긴 했는데, 내용의 경우 Overview가 없다는 점 때문에 TA에서 5점, 잘 쳐줘도 6점에 지날 겁니다. 그리고 어휘+문법 역시 다양성의 부족으로 인해 6점에 그칠 것이고요.
고로 이전 글들과 마찬가지로 다양한 표현을 사용할 수 있도록 신경써주시고, 반드시! Overview를 넣어주셔야 합니다. 이게 Task1에서 제일 중요한 문단임을 체크해주세요~
수고하셨습니다 :)