The governments around the world have become encouraged to budget heavily for sports industry nowadays. It is generally believed that the sports industry and athletes(논제가 없어서 확답을 드릴 수는 없지만, 이렇게 가는 게 맞을 겁니다.) athletics are playing vital roles to reinforce countries’ competitiveness in the world.
To begin with, many people believe that the sports industry has positive effects on countries’ images. This is because countries could introduce and promote themselves through global sports events, such as the Olympic Games and the World Cup. To be specific, when national teams or sports players of one country accomplish high scores or show up outstanding skills, global citizens start paying attention to that country. In these events, sports players represent their nations, and their plays have impacts on countries’ images. Thus, it is clear that the governments should invest financial assets for sports industry and players to develop their abilities.
I firmly believe that the governments should budget heavily for sports since the sports industry has positive effects internationally and domestically (둘은 순서를 바꿔주시면 됩니다. 보통 좁은 거 먼저, 넓은 거 나중에 배분한다고 보시면 돼요. 그리고 여기에서의 수정에 따라, 바로 뒤이어지는 내용도 순서를 재배열해주시면 되고요.). First of all, when a player performs well in games, foreign fans have interests about player’s cultures and customs as well. As a result, this phenomenon leads to improve economy in other sports and entertainment fields. Furthermore, by following their national players, citizens have become encouraged to work out and enjoy sports, and fitness levels in domestic societies could improve.
It is apparent that athletes’ brilliant activities are more effective to promote countries’ images in the world. Also, their domestic residents become more health by following their sports celebrities. Thus, the governments should back up financial assets for their sports industry.
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