Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at school. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Every passing day, the world becomes more globalized. To be prepared for the current circumstances, some people think teachers need to teach international news as a subject in school, while others consider that schools need to focus on other things. As it is a controversial topic, I will discuss both arguments and deliver my opinion on why students should learn international news in school. (이 문장 좋네요.)
On the one hand, people think the school curriculum needs to focus on subjects that can help students' future career. In this perspective, it is better to concentrate on practical skills, such as computer programming or interview skills. In addition, the subject regarding international problems is inappropriate as the lesson of international issues can be interpreted subjectively due to teachers’ personal preference in a certain country. In fact, according to a teacher's bias, the lesson can affect pupils' thoughts since they are not mature enough to contemplate by themselves.
However, I agree with the statement that schools should teach the current world issues at school. Young students need to be prepared for the globalization. Teaching international events in school can help them grow up as being a global citizen. Moreover, focusing on other countries’ matter does not mean we are neglecting our own nation. By learning how other countries react and deal with the problem, it could be a valuable lesson, which can be applied to one’s own country. Moreover, if young students learn numerous global events, it is likely to widen their thoughts and understand more deeply toward other countries. (사실 여러 개를 짧게 쓰기보다, 1~2개를 상세하게 적는 게 좋습니다.)
To sum up, people have contrasting attitudes on putting a subject that teaches international news in the school curriculum. Even though it can be (내일 시험장에서는 이런 오류를 최소화해주시기만 하면 돼요.) less important than learning practical skills, I believe that it should be taught to the young generation to make them a global citizen.
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